Friday, March 30, 2007

COMMENT ON PABLOS PAGE

This is a good start for you paper, because you are descrining how you see the ifs but you should explain more and how it affects others. Good Job!

cOMMENT ON Elliot's page

YOOO CHIKO! i agree with stanley this is a great first draft but i think that you should talk more about how does the ifs affect the u.s, also what can people do to change it? but i think so far you are doing a good job. KEEP IT UP!
PEACE !

Thursday, March 29, 2007

Final draft More about the IFS

Isabella Soteldo




More about the Industrial Food System


What exactly is the industrial food system? Many people describe it as “The Machine” I think of it as part of the machine, for me the machine is the world we live in which is made up of different components that make it the way it is. One component is the Industrial food system (IFS). The IFS believe it or not affects every living thing on planet Earth, it controls what we eat, if our bodies get sick, or even if we live or die.
Body 1
The IFS is the system that distributes food all over the United States. They kill, make and distribute our food. The way it works is by hiring hundreds of illegal immigrants which get paid less than minimum wage with no insurance or any health help and make them work by killing cows and other animals we consume. The problem is not that they kill cows or chicken or even fish, the problem is the way they do it. According to the book Fast Food Nation, one in every four hamburgers contains cow shit. Most of the food made in these factories is distributed to fast food restaurants like Mc Donald’s, Wendy’s, and Burger king. The reason why there is cow shit in our hamburgers is because when the illegal immigrants come and work at these factories, they are not trained to kill the cow, so they don’t know where to cut what so they make mistakes. Which makes the cow shit get into the meat.
Body 2

The IFS is the primary source of U.S nutrition, because since they distribute their products to one of the most important and known fast food chains in the world, people eat it all the time. Also, eating fast food or eating in fast food restaurants is a part of most American’s lives. There are various problems with the IFS, besides the fact that the meat is “shitty” because the speed of the workers line is too fast and the pay is too little, they also inject hormones to the animals and treat them very badly as well. Even though I do eat meat I think that the animals deserve a better life and shouldn’t be tortured.
Body 3
On the contraire, I believe that there is a part of the IFS that is more “normal”. Since people in the United States do eat meat, u can’t force them to never eat meat again so these animals won’t be tortured. There are also farms and factories where animals are “free range” and are allowed to have a happy life, they aren’t tortured or injected with hormones, but since there is something called the food chain people have to eat meat too (if they choose to) and the only way to eat it is killing cows, fish and chicken. I feel like we are exactly like animals just a little more sophisticated, because we don’t attack our prey by jumping on them and biting the raw meat with our bare mouths. It is part of life, but if the animals and workers are treated like they are treated in the movies that we saw in class, then that does make us savages. Instead of trying to increase the rate at which the people are working in this factories, they should decrease it and also increase the quality of the meat, maybe that way fast food chains will not buy meat and run out of business which is actually a big advantage for every one.

Body 4
Sometimes, people are aware that the food that they are eating is probably not the best for them, but it also has to do with how good of a meat can they afford? I think that in some cases the richer you are the better your health is which is a very big minus since more than half of the population is not rich and for some it is very hard to buy organic or free range food that is much healthier for you than a BIG MAC or 99 cents for four chicken Mcnuggets. Sometimes you can’t just ban the IFS from making shitty hamburgers for a good price unless you have a plan with what you will replace these shitty cheap hamburgers with that will be economic for the middle to lower class customers.
Body 5

This system tells us a lot about our culture, the number one thing that it tells us is that we are ignorant about the things that happen around us, because if more people knew that our hamburgers were “shitty” or how the animals and workers are treated in these factories, I could assure you that Mc Donald’s would not be the most visited place in the United States. The second thing that it shows about our culture (even though it isn’t really my culture, but I am growing up in it.) is that since the United States is one of the most powerful countries in the world, it shows what people can do to be even more powerful, or the lack of compassion that people have for others. Sincerely I don’t think that this way of living will change anytime soon, or maybe never because as time keeps passing by people’s heads get bigger and bigger with ignorance and less compassion towards others. I believe people should be informed of this crisis and try to inform others.
Body 6
In the movie Fast Food Nation one of the characters said “This isn’t good people vs. bad people is about the machine taking over the country” I think that the machine is not taking over the country, the machine is the country, there is no way u can possibly get out of it, because even if you think you do, u still live in it, u still breathe in it, and it will always be there. Even when people try to do drastic acts to prove a point or to change something they disagree in they are still going to be those people everyone hates, because they are against “the machine”, which is still being part of it.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe that IFS is the primary source of U.S nutrition and what most affects our lives. But I also believe that there has to be at least one thing good about it. It feeds us and keeps us living (to an extent), but it can also destroy us. As for the machine, it is always going to be there, either you agree with it or you don’t you are always going to be part of it. You can’t just plug something in the back of your head and disappear.

Wednesday, March 28, 2007

More about the Industrial Food System

More about the Industrial Food System


What exactly is the industrial food system? Many people describe it as “The Machine” I think of it as part of the machine, for me the machine is the world we live in which is made up of different components that make it the way it is. One component is the Industrial food system (IFS). The IFS believe it or not affects every living thing on planet Earth, it controls what we eat, if our bodies get sick, or even if we live or die.
Body 1
The IFS is the system that distributes food all over the United States. They kill, make and distribute our food. The way it works is by hiring hundreds of illegal immigrants which get paid less than minimum wage with no insurance or any health help and make them work by killing cows and other animals we consume. The problem is not that they kill cows or chicken or even fish, the problem is the way they do it. According to the book Fast Food Nation, one in every four hamburgers contains cow shit. Most of the food made in these factories is distributed to fast food restaurants like Mc Donald’s, Wendy’s, and Burger king. The reason why there is cow shit in our hamburgers is because when the illegal immigrants come and work at these factories, they are not trained to kill the cow, so they don’t know where to cut what so they make mistakes. Which makes the cow shit get into the meat.
Body 2

The IFS is the primary source of U.S nutrition, because since they distribute their products to one of the most important and known fast food chains in the world, people eat it all the time. Also, eating fast food or eating in fast food restaurants is a part of most American’s lives. There are various problems with the IFS, besides the fact that the meat is “shitty” because the speed of the workers line is too fast and the pay is too little, they also inject hormones to the animals and treat them very badly as well. Even though I do eat meat I think that the animals deserve a better life and shouldn’t be tortured.
Body 3
On the contraire, I believe that there is a part of the IFS that is more “normal”. Since people in the United States do eat meat, u can’t force them to never eat meat again so these animals won’t be tortured. There are also farms and factories where animals are “free range” and are allowed to have a happy life, they aren’t tortured or injected with hormones, but since there is something called the food chain people have to eat meat too (if they choose to) and the only way to eat it is killing cows, fish and chicken. I feel like we are exactly like animals just a little more sophisticated, because we don’t attack our prey by jumping on them and biting the raw meat with our bare mouths. It is part of life, but if the animals and workers are treated like they are treated in the movies that we saw in class, then that does make us savages.
Body 4
This system tells us a lot about our culture, the number one thing that it tells us is that we are ignorant about the things that happen around us, because if more people knew that our hamburgers were “shitty” or how the animals and workers are treated in these factories, I could assure you that Mc Donald’s would not be the most visited place in the United States. The second thing that it shows about our culture (even though it isn’t really my culture, but I am growing up in it.) is that since the United States is one of the most powerful countries in the world, it shows what people can do to be even more powerful, or the lack of compassion that people have for others. Sincerely I don’t think that this way of living will change anytime soon, or maybe never because as time keeps passing by people’s heads get bigger and bigger with ignorance and less compassion towards others. I believe people should be informed of this crisis and try to inform others.
Body 5
In the movie Fast Food Nation one of the characters said “This isn’t good people vs. bad people is about the machine taking over the country” I think that the machine is not taking over the country, the machine is the country, there is no way u can possibly get out of it, because even if you think you do, u still live in it, u still breathe in it, and it will always be there. Even when people try to do drastic acts to prove a point or to change something they disagree in they are still going to be those people everyone hates, because they are against “the machine”, which is still being part of it.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe that IFS is the primary source of U.S nutrition and what most affects our lives. But I also believe that there has to be at least one thing good about it. It feeds us and keeps us living (to an extent), but it can also destroy us. As for the machine, it is always going to be there, either you agree with it or you don’t you are always going to be part of it. You can’t just plug something in the back of your head and disappear.

Friday, March 2, 2007

comment on elliots page

hey elliot, chiko i read your paper and i think that it is very well organized, and you cite various sources that give many examples. The only thing you need to improve on is check for some spelling errors, and i think that you should argue stronger anout why is your diet better than the vegetarian diet.